• JayDee@lemmy.world
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    2 days ago

    “The wild boar I drugged with fentanyl is under the bed , about to wake up.”

    It just needed a comma, not more words. An ‘and’ would have also sufficed.

    Edit: also your correction communicates that the bed is about to wake up instead of the boar.

    • tisktisk@piefed.social
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      2 days ago

      huh, you’re right. It is the boar waking up not the bed.

      …not sure how I got this one wrong /s